Poetry.
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Poetry.
by Unknown Thu May 07, 2009 7:23 pm
Starting a unti on poetry, it's pretty easy, and I want your guys opinion.
(My teacher gave me praise, because I wrote like, 9 awesome poems.)
Title
Who am I, you could ask,
A daisy, a tulip,
A moth, or a Butterfly,
I don't know, who I am,
I float along, the sea of sadness,
Crying every day, Crying every night,
crying myself to sleep.
I'll post tons of poems. {If you don't like, Gaara kill you!}
(My teacher gave me praise, because I wrote like, 9 awesome poems.)
Title
Who am I, you could ask,
A daisy, a tulip,
A moth, or a Butterfly,
I don't know, who I am,
I float along, the sea of sadness,
Crying every day, Crying every night,
crying myself to sleep.
I'll post tons of poems. {If you don't like, Gaara kill you!}
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Re: Poetry.
by Shin Uchiha Thu May 07, 2009 8:22 pm
I like it, but I dont understand the story line of this poem. It went from being one thing, to the other. Look at one of mine, which is so dark.. XD
Try rhyming your ending words a little like this.
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Alone she sat in the corner,
Scared to face her horrors.
Blade carvings lay on the wall,
Her bloody tears fall.1
A lone raven pecks at her window,
As if it had something to say.
She looked up at the endow,
Her heart was in dismay.2
The blade crossed her skin,
She was coated in the blood of sin.
"Pick, Peck", the raven tapped,
Leaving the window cracked.3
Slowly, she stood up,
Putting her hands in a cusp.
The raven broke in and fell,
In her hands, he now dwells.4
Little black raven,
Now has a haven.
Little pale girl,
Smiles as she twirls.5
She put the raven down in her corner,
Sitting down next to it in wonder.
The raven wobbled left and right,
It looked up into the light.6
Not knowing what to do,
The little girl rue.
Little black raven tumbled down,
She grew a mellow frown.7
It was too late,
This was her fate.
Anything she cared for,
Would turn to nothing more.8
Alone she sat in the corner,
Scared to face her horrors.
Blade carvings lay on the wall,
Her bloody tears fall.9
Try rhyming your ending words a little like this.
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Re: Poetry.
by Shin Uchiha Thu May 07, 2009 8:30 pm
Psssttt.... Use imagination... And a word-rhyming dictionary/generator online! 
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Re: Poetry.
by Guest Thu May 07, 2009 9:09 pm
ok you guys check this out. Read closely Bao. If anyone can figure out the meaning of this one Ill be impressed
A decision to make
Not One that I wanted to have
Once I step forward,
I know there is no turning back
My eyes become glazed
from fear of the moment
Every second I waste
Is another second of torment
With bowed head I think
About which option to choose
My will will decide
If i win or I lose
A rustle of wings
A familiar voice
Tells me the story
of the wrong choice
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
The notch on his wing
The throb and the ache
A deadly mixture of
Snow white and golden gate
A life unborn
and twisted around
a mangled mess
Thank god that i found
Found away out
But I faltered and slipped
Back to the abyss
and that was the end of it
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
Gone again
Into the mist
Leaving me
with my choices and fits
Clearly now
there is a light
Its time to start living
and keep fighting the fight
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
A decision to make
Not One that I wanted to have
Once I step forward,
I know there is no turning back
My eyes become glazed
from fear of the moment
Every second I waste
Is another second of torment
With bowed head I think
About which option to choose
My will will decide
If i win or I lose
A rustle of wings
A familiar voice
Tells me the story
of the wrong choice
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
The notch on his wing
The throb and the ache
A deadly mixture of
Snow white and golden gate
A life unborn
and twisted around
a mangled mess
Thank god that i found
Found away out
But I faltered and slipped
Back to the abyss
and that was the end of it
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
Gone again
Into the mist
Leaving me
with my choices and fits
Clearly now
there is a light
Its time to start living
and keep fighting the fight
Its your choice to make
And I wont tell you no
This is your life and you walk your own road
And the bird sang to me a story of old
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